Burned

8 Apr

Velvet Verbosity offers a weekly 100 word story challenge.  However, instead of offering a visual prompt, she offers just one word.  The word for this week? BURN.

 

First degree burn:

a slight scalding

a comment that stings

the harsh light of criticism concentrated too long on a flaw.

 

“Horizontal stripes?  Brave choice.”

 

Treat at home.  Check Facebook, view her photos, practise retorts.

 

Second degree burn:

the product of extended contact with hot comments

exposure to criticisms that contain just enough truth to leave a scar.

 

General advice: air it.  Confide and seek counselling.  Phone a friend.  Speak to a trusted adult.

 

Third degree burn:

the most serious type

caused by sustained exposure to heat

 

These burns may leave skin white.

Ghostly.

 

Permanent scars

Irreparable consequences

Families disfigured.

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5 Responses to “Burned”

  1. Tara R. April 10, 2014 at 5:49 am #

    Ouch…

  2. Carrie April 12, 2014 at 9:31 am #

    Love this. So clever

  3. Hala J. April 12, 2014 at 8:41 pm #

    This was wonderful, and although it had some humor in it (perhaps dark humor) it had a lot of truth and was relayed with concise yet powerful wording. Loved it! (Especially the last one, that was quite the punchy ending).

    • mscwhite April 13, 2014 at 7:50 am #

      I’m so glad that the ending worked… I had a lot of difficulty finding phrasing that implied a particular consequence, but was also sufficiently ambiguous to allow readers to imagine their chosen horror.

  4. Jhonny April 12, 2014 at 11:59 pm #

    Love it! Intelligent and creative. I laughed a lot.

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