Friday Fictioneers #11

2 Jul

Oh how I have missed Friday Fictioneers!

This is my contribution for the week.  The prompt can be found here.

 

Punishment

Her gullibility was written on the planes of her face; an angelic gloss.  Her innocence glimmered in the half-light.

It was their signal to weave their tale.

They expected her to question them, to drill down into the detail.  She did not.  This made them boulder.  The tale got wilder.   She never sought concrete evidence.  Instead, she remained impassive, her expression set in stone.

They got bored with her, and of the story.

She did not feel the same.

She slipped a note beneath their doors:  “I found the King of Rock.”

Was it true?

Not knowing was punishment enough.

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8 Responses to “Friday Fictioneers #11”

  1. Sandra July 2, 2014 at 10:25 pm #

    Oh the subtleties here…! I nearly made a fool of myself. 😉 But now I marble at your skill.

    • mscwhite July 2, 2014 at 10:28 pm #

      Hahah! So glad you enjoyed it! Your punny comment prompted laughter that rocked me to the core :p

  2. aliciajamtaas July 3, 2014 at 3:54 am #

    I totally agree with Sandra. Much subtly well used. Kudos Alicia

  3. patrickprinsloo July 3, 2014 at 4:48 am #

    This really is on the Money Honey. Well done.

  4. patriciaruthsusan July 3, 2014 at 5:56 pm #

    I didn’t get it the first time, read the comments, then read it again and got it. I’m a little slow today. Humorous and well written. 🙂 —Susan

    • mscwhite July 3, 2014 at 8:55 pm #

      Second time is a charm! Glad you enjoyed it.

  5. camgal July 4, 2014 at 10:07 pm #

    Second time is a charm indeed. Quite a subtle humorous story 🙂

  6. Nan Falkner July 6, 2014 at 4:39 pm #

    I love your story! I read it twice too but it made sense each time. Clever and fun! Thanks for the chuckle! Nan 🙂

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