‘The Silo’

11 Mar

I have stumbled upon another flash fiction challenge.  This one is called ‘Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers‘.  The word limit here is a bit longer and more flexible than ‘Friday Fictioneers’, but hopefully the quality of the feedback is just as good.  Below is the visual prompt followed by my 175 word story.

 

 

The Silo

Architects’ Digest called it a “masterpiece, a triumph of modern engineering, the embodiment of luxury.”

Us locals didn’t read Architects’ Digest.

Our local paper dubbed it the wheat silo.  Most of us thought this was a bit generous.  After all, wheat silos are useful, they store grain for a community.  This building did nothing useful.  It gave nothing back.  The owners didn’t even hire the locals to clean the silo’s overabundance of windows.

Yet, the name stuck.  We might not have been swayed by fancy words in Architects’ Digest, but the opinions expressed in the Gazette held weight.  Probably because these opinions were our own.

The Gazette was the voice of the town.  It spoke both for us and to us.  Thus, when Max’s boy wrote that we should boycott the silo we did so.

Ten years later and the silo remains perched on the jetty.  Now, the windows are caked in grime and the paint is cracked.

A ‘For Sale’ sign hangs out front.

Rumour has it that Max’s boy will make an offer.

 

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9 Responses to “‘The Silo’”

  1. Priceless Joy March 11, 2015 at 12:58 pm #

    Very good! Max’s boy became older and wiser it seems. Now the building is worth something to him. Excellent writing.

  2. mandibelle16 March 12, 2015 at 2:50 am #

    I think Max had this plan all along to buy the building someday. Interesting story

  3. Vagrant Rhodia March 12, 2015 at 3:33 am #

    Clever take on the prompt 🙂 I enjoyed the tone and pacing of your story.

  4. Sonya March 12, 2015 at 10:00 am #

    Clever take on the prompt. Love the juxtaposition of the two publications and their treatment of the subject. Max’s boy seems to have been playing the long game there, though…

    • mscwhite March 12, 2015 at 10:14 am #

      Thanks so much! I definitely think he had a plan!

  5. John Yeo March 14, 2015 at 6:01 am #

    Very clever to uniquely focus on the building, most of us went for the river ~ Great story, all millionaire property moguls started somewhere ~ Good for Max’s boy! ~

  6. married2arod March 14, 2015 at 5:50 pm #

    Now I wanna know why they were told to boycott the silo in the first place. And I like your lead in line.

    • mscwhite March 14, 2015 at 6:08 pm #

      The cynical person would argue that Max’s boy told them to boycott the silo in order to drive the price down so he could snap it up.

      Thanks for your comments.

  7. Nortina S. March 15, 2015 at 7:09 am #

    Your use of the two newspapers really helped to establish a setting, and create a dichotomy between prestige and commonality. Also, I love how Max’s boy doesn’t have a name. Makes him even more suspicious!

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